The email I send to employers.

Discussion in 'Employment & Jobs' started by Adrian.Popescu, Jan 28, 2010.

  1. Adrian.Popescu

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    Hi everyone. I was hoping to get some advice on the email I send to employers with my C.V. Just want some opinions on how it sounds, if i should say more etc. Here it is...

    Dear Employer,

    With reference to the I.T. Technician role advertised on www.jobserve.com, please find attached a copy of my C.V.

    I am a CompTIA A+, Network+, and Microsoft Certified Professional.

    I have extensive practical experience with IBM compatible computers, Macintosh, laptops and a wide range of software packages and Operating Systems.

    I am very interested in the position advertised and I am eager to utilise my skills and knowledge.



    I look forward to hearing from you.

    Kind regards,

    My name.

    Telxxxxxxxxxxxx
     
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  2. danielno8

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    perhaps elaborate a little on how the skills you have would be of benefit to specific skills required in job posting.
     
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  3. JK2447
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    I agree with Danny, its a bit short. Say a bit more about what you do now and your experiences. I also put things like

    "I am an enthusiastic and highly motivated person who feels comfortable in a high pressure environment."

    "Conscientious, hardworking and of a smart appearance"

    "I hope that you will review my resume and consider me for the XXXXX position, as I am very keen to progress my career within a Support role. If you require any information about my current role, references or qualifications please do not hesitate to contact me.
    Thank you for considering my application.
    Sincerely"

    Good luck
    Jim
     
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  4. soundian

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    ^^ I agree with those two.

    I'm trying to avoid using the word 'extensive' in my job-hunting, it's too vague. One man's extensive is another man's beginner.

    I'd also put the MCP first.
     
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  5. JonnyMX

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    I think that although submitting a CV with an email is now considered the norm, you should consider the email to be your covering letter.

    Therefore I'd check out some websites that give you advice on what to include or not include in a cover letter (most recruitment websites have info on this).

    Generally, the purpose of a covering letter is to make an employer want to read your CV.
    The problem with your email is that it doesn't really tell the employer anything that sets you out from the crowd.
    The qualifications and experience you mention will most likely be the bare minimum required for the job, and everyone else will have them too.

    You need to get them interested by telling them about recent jobs you've done, or any skills that set you apart from the crowd. It should also be specific to the job you're applying for. The job description will ask for certain things, and you need to assure them you have what they are asking for.

    If I received that email I'd just think that it was a bog standard email that you had sent to a dozen others without really putting any thought into it.

    Just my observations... :biggrin
     
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  6. Adrian.Popescu

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    Thank's very much everyone. The advice has been great help:)
     
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  7. arj7

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    I agree with what is posted above, just say how how much of a hard worker you are how determined you are how much you want the job etc, because all your qualifications will be on your CV anyway
     

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